天长地久(完)

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jas
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天长地久(完)

Post by jas » 2004-03-26 8:45

应作者要求删除。

虞美人字 9-29-1006 10:30 PM
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猫咪头
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Post by 猫咪头 » 2004-03-26 9:12

冲上来欢迎 JAS :-P :heartpump:
MMT

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Post by js » 2004-03-26 9:49

看,我说啥来着。

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Post by 笑嘻嘻 » 2004-03-26 10:19

真好看。一步一步很有山雨欲来风满楼的的味道。 :heartpump: :heartpump: :heartpump:
标题是此恨绵绵无绝期的意思吗?

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-03-26 10:37

写得真抓人,到底罗一一以前有什么故事啊?

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Post by jas » 2004-03-26 20:17

笑嘻嘻,不是啊,是爱情友情亲情都天长地久的意思,嘻。
JS,我很不好意思。
猫咪头,多谢多谢。
海伦 :lol: :oops:

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Post by 豪情 » 2004-03-26 20:40

我也来和茂密头一起夹道欢迎. :lol:

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Post by tiffany » 2004-03-29 9:54

好勤奋啊,小笑形容得真好,山雨欲来风满楼的感觉。
乡音无改鬓毛衰

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Post by jas » 2004-03-31 6:56

  第七章
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Post by js » 2004-03-31 9:29

:admir002:
i like LU PENG.

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-03-31 9:47

唉,每段就露个一鳞半爪的,专门折磨读者。我真想摇了JAS的胳膊:竹筒倒豆子,全交代了吧。 :shock:

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Post by 笑嘻嘻 » 2004-03-31 10:00

我谁都喜欢。 :admir002: 真好看。 :heartpump:

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Post by tiffany » 2004-03-31 13:51

helenClaire wrote:唉,每段就露个一鳞半爪的,专门折磨读者。我真想摇了JAS的胳膊:竹筒倒豆子,全交代了吧。 :shock:
我同海伦一个想法。 :evil:
乡音无改鬓毛衰

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Post by jas » 2004-03-31 18:01

好了好了,就交待了。
因为交待的话就要从小时候开始写起,不然说不清楚。 :oops:

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Post by tiffany » 2004-03-31 18:41

这叫交待了, 这叫 交待了! 我愤怒的质问
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Post by 笑嘻嘻 » 2004-03-31 19:08

是“就交待了。”而不是“交待了”。 :lol: [/quote]

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Post by jas » 2004-03-31 20:16

笑嘻嘻 :heartpump: :love011:

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Post by jas » 2004-04-01 1:29

  第八章
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Post by js » 2004-04-01 3:52

:-(

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-04-01 8:50

夏为春打她呀?看得我哆嗦了一下。 :-(

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Post by tiffany » 2004-04-01 10:03

看得我老人家眼窝热热的
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Post by 笑嘻嘻 » 2004-04-01 11:48

:heartpump: :heartpump: 好看。

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Post by 蚌壳精 » 2004-04-02 9:55

:evil: 这些小朋友这样坏,我要是看见了也要打他们 :x

三个人做好朋友的快活时光多好,为什么后来就要这样惨烈 :verysad:
钟声当当响,乌鸦嘎嘎叫,战火纷慢慢,烧在田野上...

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Post by look » 2004-04-03 4:01

真好看!
有奇怪预感,天恩和陆鹏会不会?

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Post by andy » 2004-04-07 7:29

真好看!
子非鱼,安知鱼之乐!

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Post by 豪情 » 2004-04-07 23:48

忍不住跳进来.
真感动.

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Post by js » 2004-04-13 2:43

我说,亲耐的,咱都复活回来了,怎么还没长久下面的?

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Post by jas » 2004-04-15 1:44

  第九章
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Post by jas » 2004-04-16 9:48

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-04-16 10:03

罗一一也是小时候打架的孩子。 :love007: :love015:

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Post by tiffany » 2004-04-16 18:43

这个故事写的真够惆怅的.
感叹当成年人真没有意思, 人人都有一本儿烂帐, 人人都不容易, 连社会都不能怪. 好不容易学会了接受自己, 当然也不能责备自己, 唉, 感叹"譬如朝露, 去日苦多" 的人, 都是活得比较得意的人啊.
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Post by js » 2004-04-18 5:42

不枉我发烧也惦记着一一。

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Post by 啫哩 » 2004-04-19 23:11

一一有何真知这样说一就知道二的朋友,真羡慕啊.

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Post by jas » 2004-04-25 22:37

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-04-26 14:04

我现在走火入魔了,瞧见打架的戏就兴奋。 :oops:
呐闷一下:夏为春和一一关系这么近,同学们就没有背后议论他俩儿是一对? :roll:

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Post by jas » 2004-04-26 18:07

应该是有议论的,但罗一一这时候尚混沌一片,因为从第一人称写,所以她应该并不自觉。
而且由于从小学上来的旧同学深知罗一一和夏为春、陆鹏的渊源,可能多半也有惯性思维,并不很认真地认为他们是一对。
她目前对夏为春的感情其实应该是属于那种独占性的友谊。因为自小在感情上极度缺乏,所以牢牢霸住夏为春,觉得夏为春是她一个人的,这个也是以后悲剧的最大因素。

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Post by jas » 2004-04-26 20:12

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Post by js » 2004-04-27 3:15

好看!
奇怪的是,夏对一一太好了,好得不只是一个当兄长对妹妹的关心了。不能不想他是否真的喜欢一一?
JAS的这篇好像与以往不同,细节仍然好看,而且更真实动人。另外,就是总有一种淡淡的伤心在里面。不论是年少轻狂还是亲情真挚。

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-04-27 7:46

一一这个人物我能理解,包括她念别人情书的举动。实在是孤女心态,对自己手头上的人都抓得紧紧的。谁也不能责备她,为了生存。
夏为春就让我疑惑了,照说这个年纪的男孩子,一般不喜欢和小女生在一起的,各自爱好实在不一样。他让一一念情书的举动,让我反感,所以很不明白他对一一是什么样的感情。一般有号召力的孩子头都具备一种比较宽广的胸襟,有所为有所不为,才能让别的孩子们由敬佩而生跟随之心,觉得士为知己者,值。夏为春显然不是这样的人,他刻薄,居高临下,对人冷,那么他的号召力就是来自他父亲的权势了?一个“夏衙内”,就让我难以喜欢了。 :shock: 而且前面提到他扇过一一的耳光,我已经扣了他三十三分,现在他一副狐假虎威的样子,分数几乎是不及格了。
JAS写的人物生动,象是立在我眼前似的,所以我才能当个真人似的大发议论。 :oops:

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Post by jas » 2004-04-27 18:05

js wrote:另外,就是总有一种淡淡的伤心在里面。不论是年少轻狂还是亲情真挚。
其实JS啊,你觉得总有一种淡淡的伤心,可能只是因为你预先知道结局并不良好的缘故吧? :-P

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Post by jas » 2004-04-27 18:25

helenClaire wrote:夏为春就让我疑惑了,照说这个年纪的男孩子,一般不喜欢和小女生在一起的,各自爱好实在不一样。他让一一念情书的举动,让我反感,所以很不明白他对一一是什么样的感情。一般有号召力的孩子头都具备一种比较宽广的胸襟,有所为有所不为,才能让别的孩子们由敬佩而生跟随之心,觉得士为知己者,值。夏为春显然不是这样的人,他刻薄,居高临下,对人冷,那么他的号召力就是来自他父亲的权势了?一个“夏衙内”,就让我难以喜欢了。 而且前面提到他扇过一一的耳光,我已经扣了他三十三分,现在他一副狐假虎威的样子,分数几乎是不及格了。
海伦评得这样仔细真叫我感动,嘻嘻,唉,海伦你真好哇。
夏为春的号召力的确大部分来自他父亲的权势,他所处的环境让他比同龄人早熟,也让他多一种“衙内”的感觉,所以他不尊重别人。
他和一一在一起,一半是习惯使然,一半是一一并不象一般的小女生。性相近,现在习也相近了。而且他也有很多时间是不和一一在一起的,不过一一不知道而已。
另外,他至少还有优点就是讲义气和守承诺,这个以后会写到。
不过总体来说,一开始夏为春的定位就不是好孩子。

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Post by js » 2004-04-28 1:28

不是好孩子所以才更吸引一一?
那么,结局不是伤心的?先别告诉我,千万别说。

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Post by DeBeers » 2004-04-28 15:04

jas写的不伤心的结局不多吧。想起来就为真知伤心。
钻石恒久远

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Post by jas » 2004-05-25 2:49

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Post by M&M » 2004-05-25 11:01

like this one.

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Post by helenClaire » 2004-06-02 9:24

他从来没有吻过我,
罗一一活到快三十岁还在写日记纳闷夏为春爱不爱她,我也跟着呐闷了很久。直到JAS给出这个证据,简直笑出来,只这一条就可以拍下惊堂木发出终审判决:夏为春不爱罗一一。 :twisted:

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Post by tiffany » 2004-06-02 9:31

海伦真残酷。
说起来,某人某日发感慨说男女之间没有纯洁的友谊,真的没有么?
8过话又说回来了,现在这个市道,连男人和男人之间,女人和女人之间都没有纯洁友谊了。
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Post by helenClaire » 2004-06-02 9:39

It's In His Kiss

Does he love me
I wanna know
How can I tell if he loves me so?

(Is it in his eyes?) Oh no,
You'll be decieved
(Is it in his eyes?) Oh no,
He'll make believe
If you wanna know
If he loves you so
It's in his kiss

(Or is it in his face?) Oh, no
It's just his charm
(In his warm embrace?) Oh, no
That's just his arms
If you wanna know
If he loves you so
It's in his kiss

Kiss him and squeeze him tight
And find out what you wanna know
If it's love, if it really is
It's there in his kiss

(About the way he acts?) Oh, no
That's not the way
And you're not listening to all that I say
If you wanna know
If he loves you so
It's in his kiss

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Post by M&M » 2004-06-03 6:20

一一对于夏为春来说,太是自己人是手足,而不是爱慕对象。

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Post by jas » 2004-06-03 6:43

海伦,日记是一一很久以前写的,在“旧文件夹”中。
你是对的,夏为春不爱罗一一。现在的罗一一已经明白夏为春并不爱她,她也是这么对陆鹏说的。
:?这个世界上,也只有陆鹏,会这么问这件事,也只有陆鹏,有资格问这件事。我看着陆鹏的眼睛,他的眼睛里有我亮晶晶的眼睛闪着湿润的光,我笑了笑,低声说:“我爱上了夏为春,可是,他并不爱我。”
她困惑的是:“夏为春究竟是不是根本没爱过我,还是曾经也爱过?就算爱过,那种爱算是什么呢?”
但无论如何,她爱他。

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